Monday, September 29, 2008
100 words 2
“Are we gonna see dinosaurs, ma?” Davids voice broke the concentration of Cindy, and she turned to glance at him for a moment. About to answer, she was interrupted by being shoved by the person in line behind her. She tugged her hand lightly out of the grip of David, getting the money out of her purse while requesting two tickets for the Bronx. Once she had them, she turned around, her hand opening and she anticipated the gentle touch of David. It wasn’t there. Her brown eyes opened wide, and she searched the station. “David?” He was gone. Why?
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13 comments:
This peiece really makes me think what happened to David, really good job.
This piece deffinitly makes you think about what happen to david and it leaves you wanting more for the story. I really liked it.
jackie c
I like the suspense and i like being able to finsih the story myself.
this makes me wonder what could of happened to david
I wonder what happened to the kid....
I like how it's very real.
the piece leaves you to want to read more, and find out what happened to david?
I really like this one. I think that it had good descriptions for being so short and I like how you ended it. I wanted to know the resolution and I think that this was really well written.
This story is very realistic, as stated above. It also eems to show how your life can change at an instant, without you thinking it will or expecting it to happen.
this is a cool way of using a very real situation
this made me really want to know what happened to david. i liked how it was realistic, and how the ending could be anything
This is a sad piece, but it is very good because it leaves the reader thinking.
I like the suspense of wanting to know what happened to david
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