Thursday, September 25, 2008
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I was the happiest girl alive. My parents are finally letting me go drive with my boyfriend, Josh. They said that I better be careful and if he did anything he wasn’t supposed to, to call them right away so they could go pick me up. When he picked me up, I had a smile that was wider then my face and he gave me a kiss and smiled. Every time I tried to talk to Josh, he wouldn’t answer me.I started screaming at him and the tears were just pouring out as I was yelling. He looks at me like I’m some sort of psycho or something and just didn’t say anything. We didn’t really talk for the rest of the car ride, and when we went to dinner, nothing really happened. When we were leaving I asked him if he loved me and he just looked at me and wouldn’t say anything. I started to flip out again, but no response. I felt like something was up with him and I just knew something was wrong and had something to tell me.“Can you just please tell me if something is wrong, Please tell me if we’re over or if you love me anymore?”I scream, and scream when I turn around and see a truck coming towards and the bright lights were shinning into my eyes. I knew that was the end and cried “I love you,” to Josh before we hit. I felt my heart beating as I was stuck in the car and I saw Josh lying there dead. I started bawling knowing this was my entire fault and finally realizing he was gone. I loved him, but I’ll never know if he loved me because he never gave me the answer.
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I liked this. I think that you made really good use of the pictures and I really like the idea. The only ting that I would think about changing is the last sentence. I feel like you did a good job during the story showing everything that you needed, and that a good reader will easily be able to get your point and understand this. Great job though.
I really liked reading this, and I was always wondering about why Josh wouldn't answer you, hah. It was kind of blunt, but I still enjoyed reading it and I also think you made great use of the picture. It was really sad, but I loved reading it.
i thought this was good, but i thought she freaked out a little too soon. it was kind of random, other wise i really liked how it left you in shock and thinking if he loves her too.
woah. just woah. that was so... sad and touching and awesome and the ending was just woah... this is so real. just you know... like everyone could see it and how something like this could actually happen.
This deffinitly gave a good use of the picture. It left you wondering, why he wasnt talking. I liked it though and I thought it brought out a teenager life, with all the ups and downs a girl goes through. It was interesting.
jackie c
This story was very good. The writer did a great job having such a deep story in only 200 to 300 words.
i liked this piece it made me really think of what was wrong with Josh. i liked how i was always thinking
this was great even though it was sad. it hurt to imagine that girls thoughts. amazing job, it reallymade me think.
I agree with robyn about the ending, but other wise i think it was i really good idea.
I think you jumped into events too quickly. The way you said you went from having such a wide smile on and then he just wouldnt answer you and you got mad. Overall i really liked the story.
I really liked this one a lot. It always kept me thinking, and it provoked a sad, yet meaningful message.
surprising ending. leaves the reader thinking
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