Monday, September 29, 2008
100 words 5
I take a seat on the train; look up from the paper, a man glances at me and he looks ragged and old. He wears barely anything in the middle of the winter. I sit there all dressed up in my black suit. The man looks familiar, I see him everyday. He asks me where I am off to and I tell him to work, where I just started. He somehow knows the exact address and number. We talk for a while and figure something out. He tells me he got laid off one day before I started working there.
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11 comments:
I like the twist at the end of the story and how the two men seem so firendly, yet one gave the other his poor fait.
this is sad, but i like how the author doesn't let you know how they know eachother until the last few words.
ouch. i feel really bad for the guy who got laid off.
i like how there is an uxpected twist at the end. definetly leaves the reader suprised and thinking
I think it was a fgood idea to show the connection between the man who had everything and the man who had nothing since the other had just taken his job.
i like how its sad at the end knowing theres a twist, very creative, i like it a lot.
cool piece it's really different i wasnt expectingsomeone to think of this.
that was a really cool story yet really sad. I liked the twist at the end, but you feel really bad for the man who got laid off.
jackie c
I like the way the author showed how friendly the two men were to one another, even though one man took the others job. This is also very creative.
good twist on how he got laid off
Great twist, I really liked this piece. I feel bad for the person who got fired, though, and how their conversation seemed so casual until he mentions he was laid off.
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